I need to have 400-500 words in this essay. I only have 288. Can you add more stuff to this essay to make it at least 400-500. Can you also correct any bad grammar, please?
Cause and effect of smoking
We were all warned that smoking is harmful for our bodies. We have heard it all over the place. However, some people got addicted to smoking and have a hard time quitting. Smoking kills an average of 450,000 people each year as I searched in the internet. That is more than car accidents, drunk driving, and illegal substances. So why do people continue to smoke? What causes people to even want to smoke when they know the deadly effects?
If you ever thought of smoking, change your mind because smoking is one of the most difficult addictions to break. It kills more people than any disease in the world. Most people who smoke do so because they can't stop. People like smoking because it makes them feel energized and aware. Some people may start smoking because they saw someone that they liked smoking and thought it was cool. Trying it with friends is another reason some people may smoke. Smoking harms almost every organ in your body, which causes many diseases.
Smoking causes lung cancer heart attacks, strokes, high blood pressure, and asthma. It also damages teeth, fingers, and hair. Lung cancer is the number one killer in smokers. Some people go see their doctor for help on how to quit smoking. The doctor may give them medication to help their addiction go away. The minute you stop smoking, your body goes to work to repair much of the damage.
If you’re a non-smoker, you have a good chance of living a longer life than a smoker because you will be much healthier than a smoker. Non-smokers also have the ability to taste food better than smokers do because smoking kills taste buds.
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We were all warned that smoking is harmful for our bodies. We have heard it all over the place INCLUDING THE MEDIA(not really since they sell them on tv), FROM OUR LOVE ONES, AND FROM EDUCATIONAL PROGRAMS AVAILABLE AT SCHOOL. However, some people HAS GOTTEN addicted to smoking and have a hard time qutting. Smoking kills an average of 450,000 people each year as I searched in the internet. That is more than car accidents, drunk driving, and illegal substances. So why do people continue to smoke? What causes people to even want to smoke when they know the deadly effects?
If you ever thought of smoking, THEN YOU MIGHT WANT TO THINK AGAIN because smoking is one of the most difficult addictions to break. It kills more people than any disease in the world. Most people who smoke CONTINUE TO do so because OF THIS DEADLY ADDICTION. People like smoking because it makes them feel energized, aware, AND THINK IT MAKES THEM LOOK COOL(WHICH WE ALL KNOW IT REALLY MAKES THEM THE COMPLETE OPPOSITE; A FOOL). Some people may start smoking because they saw someone that they liked OR LOOK UP TO smoking and thought it was cool. Trying it with friends is another reason some people may smoke. Smoking harms almost every organ in your body, which causes many diseases AND EVEN DEATH.
Smoking causes lung cancer heart attacks, strokes, high blood pressure, and asthma. It also damages teeth, fingers, and YOU hair. Lung cancer is the number one killer in smokers. Some people VISIT their doctor for help on how to quit smoking. TheIR doctor may give(PRESCRIBE?) them medication to help their addiction go away. THE GOOD NEWS IS the minute you stop smoking, your body goes to work to repair much of the damage.
If you’re a non-smoker, you have a good chance of living a longer life than a smoker because you will be much healthier than a smoker. Non-smokers also have the ability to taste food better than smokers do because smoking kills taste buds. IN THE END, IF YOU START THINKING ABOUT SMOKING, THINK AGAIN.
I'm not totally good at editing but I tried fixing the ones I thought needed to be fixed. I even added a few words to some sentences to make them longer but its your choice on what to do.
Also if you need to write more words then you should go into details like how smoking can change a person life drastically in both the workforce and family life. Also write about what they could of bought with the money they used to buy ciggerates(I don't know how to spell that word)
Overall, this was a pretty decent essay.
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